Kiwisatsuma

I really like this. It has a very interesting plot and I wasn't expecting the ending at all. There are a couple of things I would maybe change: Whatever did ...

No problem :) I haven't got much experience at reviewing so I hope I'm not doing too badly. The problem is, I'd have to have the king or the general ...

Hello there :) I like this and I think you described the army really well at the beginning. I would suggest a few changes: An odd assortment of men, some ...

This is good! You really showed the main character's pain well and I liked that it had such a hopeful ending despite the sad tone. There are a few grammatical ...

I haven't really got much to add because I think the other reviewers have covered most of the stuff, but I will say that although I love this line: The ...

I like it! This is very sweet and it's nice to read something with a happy ending. It's just a small formatting thing, but I think this would be much ...

I actually liked the lack of speech marks. I thought it worked well, because the characters didn't say much to each other and the story seemed to be more about ...

Okay, first review ever so I'm not sure how this is gonna go. Hopefully it's helpful :) But anyway, I really like this. You came up with an excellent villain ...

Hi :) Complete newbie here. Well, I go through phases, but I'm in a 'write a lot' phase at the moment, so yeah, I'm joining this website because it seems ...