Kiwisatsuma

Hey there :) Hmm, interesting. This seems like quite an original take on the whole 'running away' idea and it definitely has potential. I'm not sure that it really is ...

Hey there :) Welcome to YWS! :D I like this a lot. It seems like a very interesting beginning to a novel and your descriptions are really good. I would ...

Hey :) I like this a lot. I was really drawn in from the first sentence, you described the setting very vividly and it felt like the main character had ...

Hey again :) Well, I finally reached my procrastination limits for the next couple of days :D I'm just gonna review chapter one because there don't seem to be any ...

Okay, first ever poem o.0 YWS is making me want to do all sorts of crazy things. Anyway, any and all comments and suggestions are loved :) I wish I ...

Hey :) I like this a lot. You say a lot in a few words without just stating facts. There are a few small things I would maybe adjust to ...

Well, I've never done a storybook before but this looks fun so here goes :D Name: Clarissa Harrington Age: 15 Gender: Female Appearence: Medium height and slim with wispy white ...

Hey there :) Well, you've certaintly got an interesting plot going on here. I like how you get straight into it as well without dallying around too long. There are ...

Hey there :) Well, it seems like this is setting up for in interesting story but I do think you need to make some changes to improve it. I reach ...

Hey :) I enjoyed reading this. It's well written and I like the character of Tom, from what we've seen of him so far. You do slip into past tense ...

"100 Years of Solitude" by Marquez. Worst book ever written... I'm serious... I hated it, hated reading it, more like trying to force myself to read it. It was just... ...

Hi :) Interesting! I really like the characters in this, especially Whisper's mother and I like how Whisper has a distinct, entertaining voice. it’s This should be 'its'. You only ...

Hi there :) Welcome to YWS! A survival guide to vampires sounds like an intersting idea for a story and this story has a lot of potential. However, you'll need ...

Hey there :) For a book opening, I like this a lot. It's well written and draws you in quickly, and it's a good length too. I do think you ...

Hey there :) For a first go at fantasy, this is really good. I especially like the plot you've devised - it has a lot of potential. There are a ...