Kisonakl

The Stranger “Mr. Han, there’s someone here to see you. Shall I bring her into your office?” “Who is it?” the man behind the door asked his secretary gruffly, his ...

Wow. I liked this a lot. It kind of reminded me of H.G. Wells' story, "The Star"! A sentient body of antimatter is an interesting idea to posit. This is ...

"Human was a term you gave something that was flawed." Absolutely scathing and, yet, somehow believable. I like this character a lot. "I didn't care if they would have hated ...

Thank you for your critique! I went back and cleaned it up a bit in my saved draft :) Also, I put a footnote at the very end of the ...

Thanks for the review! I went back to my saved draft and tinkered around with a few things (the main editing awaits when I finish the first draft of the ...

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Sounds quite a bit like Stephen Baxter's Xeelee sequence. Check that out before you write anything.

Dancing In Time Eyes closed, she could feel as the stifling air of the studio parted to give passage to her gliding, supple form. The rays of the late afternoon ...

Yeah, at least with my group we attempt to turn every word said into a "That's what she said," and, if it's guys talking over IM or something, it's about ...

All in all, a humorous exposition, but, before being thrust into a comical story about Lucifer's domestic life with a wife and son, I think even a little more background ...

I enjoyed reading the story, BBB. Quite a bit. It's good how you took the time to build the suspense, transforming a birthday party into a séance slowly and deliberately. ...

Thanks a lot for the critique! You are correct in your guess about the timeline; this chapter, though told by Desmond to someone on July 20th, 1969 (the night of ...

_ e _ _ _ _ _ i n e ? I'd assume that's the ending..

I often do literary or historical references, sort of like LOST does (e.g., Desmond Hume, John Locke, Mikhail Bakunin)

Anyone have any helpful tips for this piece?