KingKamor

I'm reading "Great Sky River" by Gregory Benford. It's the inspiration of the inspiration for one of my works. I'll probably read the rest of the Galactic Center Series once ...

Hi there. If possible, I would like more criticism for my sci-fi novel, Rings of Rhea. There are four parts out right now, and they're fairly long, so there's no ...

I use my keyboard most of the time, but when I have to churn out story ideas and outlines I use a pen in my moleskin notebook. The hardest thing ...

Man, I hope there are still some people around who read my stuff back when I was still an impressionable teenager... or, you know, not. It's been five years, so ...

Sorry for the delay, but here it is: chapter three. Constructive criticism is appreciated, and I hope that you enjoy it. Rated for violence. ------------------ Chapter 3: Vampire The scratching ...

It seemed a little too fast to me. You have good grammar, and it's good as a prologue, I guess, but it couldn't really hold my attention very well.

The beginning needs a little more work. It seemed a little plain in its description, and I would have gotten bored and quit if I hadn't read fast enough. There ...

A/N: Thank you all for giving the first chapter such great comments and critiques. I hope that this second chapter will be just as well-received. Anyway, constructive criticism is well-appreciated, ...

I love how you personified Death as some kind of disgruntled employee kind of guy. Kind of like Terry Pratchet. I also liked how he named off the other two ...

Other than a few grammar mistakes near the beginning, I really liked this. I had a hard time getting into it because the beginning was a little boring, but you ...

Wow, thanks for the nitpicking, Ezme! I've actually been waiting for someone to do the whole quote-critique thing for this. And thanks for pointing out a fundamental mistake in my ...

Everyone else has already pointed out the grammatical errors, so I'll just say that the whole presentation really fit. It gave me a somber, almost blank feeling, and I think ...

Thank you both for your comments! I didn't think that this would fair well, but I guess that it did! XD @Tusker93: I've already planned out much of the story, ...

The second paragraph has two run-on sentences. You can easily separate both of them into two, and it should make more sense that way. Same as above for the third ...

I liked all of the violence and such in LOTF, actually. I'm also into horror books and whatnot, so I liked how disturbing it was. I had to read it ...