Kimberlykat

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I agree with Silly Sydtix 100% Keep on drawing! That's brilliant for 10, infact I think the skull is fantastic!

This poem reminds me of (Now I'm not sure if the naming is accurate) 'The Hawk' (Forgot author too). Well, like I always say, BRilliANT!

Brilliant work. Perfect vocabulary selection. Humorous, although it isn't expressed that much. One would expect drama from the setting of things rather than an alcoholics' version of Wonder Land. But ...

confused emotions, bitterness or..er..? Very moving but it sounds like your ripping up your shirt because the first stanza has a sweet scent but as it rolls on...I don't know. ...

I didn't care for whatever rhyming pattern just as long as it was great, and I tell you it's fantastic. Well it sparks up memories, to tell you honestly and ...

Brilliant display of thoughts. Made me think of cold sweat and melting ice. Not forgetting the feeling of loneliness.

I'll try working on a stretched version.

Apart from critique, (Something I never do) It is put together perfectly. The introduction was great and transitions were made smooth. Overall, I would say this is something I would ...

Genius. Simple but genius. The last stanza was my favorite because of the word selection, yes they went perfect. Overall, I had nothing to say but...brilliant! ;) Liked: "Like a ...

Brilliant. Yeah, umm... It flowed beautifully but the end was rather random and unexpected, which is a good shock, but it sort of came on too hard. Otherwise I absolutely ...

Sharpen your swords on the grey rocks of pride. Those tongues of yours even go to scraping the hot asphalt.

Brilliant. The first thing that springs to my mind after reading this piece is a cord dangling beneath a bridge, like, say the one in San Fransisco, and a NY ...

I agree with Charlotte. The repetition worked incredibly well! Yes, your poetry has this bit to it that one can't exactly point a finger at. Interesting. Interesting poem, I know ...

Genious! Just wondering, is it ment to be read slow? God Bless- KIM