Kim

all i can say, is this is awesome. i have never read anything about love as you have put it. i give an AAAAAA++++++ kim

LMAO, i agree with everyone, but this poem is so funny, it had me laughing. makes me never want to grow up and grow old. lol no negative comment from ...

this is awesome, i loved it. i found only a few grammar errrors. other then that perfect. The wind picked up! The shutters upon the window crashed, the wind chimes ...

I really liked this, it was really easy to read and the ending was great. great job. kim

i found this easy to read, but very confusing. i am not sure what you are trying to get across to the reader. kim

i really like this, the topic is great, i can feel the emotion you are trying to write about. here are a few things to maybe help you, since this ...

I squint harder, into the fog, I rub my arms, hairs standing on end. Hairs standing on end. squint isnt a strong enough word for what you are trying to ...

now that i have read chapters 1-3, this makes more sense. i like the chat room set up. its different. i wish this chapter had more in it. you have ...

i can see your writing changing, getting more discriptive. as i am reading the chapters one by one. :) the feather intrigues me, i like how you added mystery, and ...

i like the story, but it moves to fast. try adding a little more, even dispcriptions of the people talking. this is very good. i am enjoying reading this. off ...

i really like how you started this out. and the dialogue between the two friends is very good. you should add a lttle more discription , just to give the ...

* is laughing my guts out* this was by far the most intertaining poem i have read. you took the strong emotions we all feel, and put them on paper ...

i agree with what they said above, to short to critique, but a nice start of a poem. i like the idea. kim

this is beautiful, i found a few errors, but you did a great job. Let's stop, listen for a hour ( try something like, "Lets stop and listen for an ...

ok, so the first paragraph pretty much grossed me out. good job. :) I knew that I had just had a delectable meal, suit for a king. Why didn’t humans ...