Kim

This very good, i like the discriptions you use. It is hard to read though, try and break it up into paragraphs. Large blocks tend to keep people from reading ...

I really liked it, cliche or not. i like how you showed love and hate, that is a big part of our lives. It will always be the subject in ...

i think you did a great job with the colors, and getting the face to stand out. This is very good. kim

This is great, it is very hard to draw with pencil, using only black, grey's and white. you have the technique down. now for the critique. The one thing that ...

this is great bear, i found just a few things you might want to change. I had done that to her. I had killed another human. ( the first sentence ...

lets try this again. lol. this is very good. it is a lot better with the changes made. although it was very good to begin with. kim

i like this, i also cant wait for the rest. good job. kim

thanks bear, the belts are no longer worn to hold our jeans up, they are now worn around the outside of the shirts. lol. and i agree on the sea ...

Look At Me She wears a zip up hoodie. Her jeans slung low on hips That seductively sways as she walks. A few layered shirts hug her form. Her shoes ...

thanks for the advice. i will go through and read it again, i just thought using one word was getting boring. lol. so i tried to change it up. i ...

Chapter 10 The afternoon sky soon became dark. The ominous cloud was closing in faster than the angels could get Christian to run. His little legs pumping as fast as ...

thanks, i will go back and edit. i appreciate it.

OMG, that was so awesome, wow. the way you discribe the emotions is so good. this story rocks. it just keeps getting better and better. when you talk i can ...

your characters are so cool, i love the way they converse with each other. your discriptions make it so easy to visualize everything. the conversations are very good. this also ...

this is really good, and getting interesting, not much to critique on, scotty pretty much touched on it all. so got the pleasure of just reading. this is great. kim