Kim

wow bear, this is awesome. i liked how you got your emotions in this. i see absolutely nothing wrong with this. it is great. kim

Chapter 11 The sun was starting to set, the days were getting shorter as fall slowly inched its way towards winter. The citizens in the small city of White Rapids ...

Thank you for commenting, i will go back and make some changes. kim

short and to the point. i really enjoyed reading this. you hit the subject right on. Great job. kim

I thought this was very good. very well written. i could tell it was a nightmare. i liked the discriptions you used. as far as critiquing, it doesnt matter if ...

This is very well done, i didnt know you drew also. you captured the depth with shading, everything looks like it is in porportion. this is awesome . do you ...

Sunn A Plant of the pea family, grows in Asia and Australia kim

wow, thank you for taking so much time and critiquing this, you have no idea how much i appreciate this. this is my first time writing a story. and this ...

I dont no how you could put up with that. You would think as an adult, he could act like one. i am hoping your time goes very fast. lol. ...

Last night we got our first snow. and the day before was in the 60's. Go figure. i had hope winter would stay away. It came late, but it did ...

you definately hit the mark with this one. Short but to the point. I cant find any mistakes, i really like this. kim

short and to the point. i really liked it. sometimes i like to use my imagination when reading, instead of always being told what to see. with few words, you ...

i was not reading and looking for errors, so if there are any hopefully kitty got them. i was reading for the meaning i found in this poem. the first ...

This is great, i can tell you love to ride. Your discriptions are very good. I would suggest that you put puncuation in your poem. Poems work the same as ...

wow, this is deep. i enjoyed reading this alot. the only thing i would recommend is to add puncuation. commas, periods ect. also check your capitalization. Read it out loud ...