Kim

as a poem this is ok, the first part kinda gruesome. laughed during some , and confused on others. it was hard to follow. but well written. kim

bear, you have me intrigued, this to me is the best chapter so far. i cant wait for you to post 12. this story keeps you glued to your seat. ...

when you complete this, it will be an awesome story the first paragraph lost me, i know you were trying to describe the connections, but i had to reread it ...

this is full of emotion, you did a great job with ,i sure wish he would have called you back. i loved it kim

i liked where your story was taking me, i love that era of time. the very beginining was confusing tho, the first few sentences. you might want to add the ...

this has the making of a great story. my suggestion , would be to slow down while writing it. dont rush from one scene to the next. take your time. ...

this is great bear, i like the drama and excitement in this chapter. also how you are putting the mystery together. i love it.

wow, these are beautiful, it looks like they would be in magazines, or calenders. you are very good, i think you have found your gift. now if you could make ...

Something Out There Chapter two “I can’t believe it hurts like this Bri” Seth whispered as he looked into her face. A face so familiar to him, he loved her ...

this is an awesome story, i really like the dialogue between your characters. very well written. very suspenseful. great job. kim

wow bear, this just keeps getting better and better, i never even thought the party would end the way it did, awesome job, cant wait for chapter 10

This is very good, i enjoyed reading it, and also look forward to your next chapter. i have only two changes to mention. as mentioned above, i would break up ...

wow BBB, this is awesome. i couldnt read fast enough. i also wasnt expecting Samantha to be eliminated. you did a great job in keeping me hooked and on the ...

thank you for commenting. my word program keeps changing it to one of his ( kinds). i prefer (kind) also. it make me wonder if the program is always correct. ...

this just keeps getting better and better, it is definately a mystery thiriller. cant wait to see what happens in the next chapter. kim