Kim

this is really good bear, i love it, it made me laugh. i cant wait for you to add to this. awesome job. kim

Something Out There Chapter 4 Seth cautiously scanned every space in the cave, slowly turning his head to look over his shoulder, tucking his wings in to see behind him. ...

wow , this was great, well written and i love the idea of the dog watching. awesome job. kim

i really like your choice of words, i could put a mental image in my mind. the emotion was also there. you did a great job. kim

i really like this, it is beautiful. the only thing you need to do is break up the paragraph alittle. great job , keep writing kim

bear, this was a great ending. the only thing that confused me, was the 4th paragraph from the end. re: i was not invited......who is I? that is the only ...

this is great, this will be an awesome story when you are done. i really like the visual you put out there. i can put myself there as i read. ...

this is by far the best one yet bear. i love the action and suspense. you did an awesome job. there is more to come right? i sure hope so ...

lol, this made me laugh, i dont know if that was your intention, but i really liked this. something short, like your mind just came up with it, and you ...

this is beautiful. that pretty much sums it up. no critiquing just love it. awesome job. kim

the story line was good, i had a tendancy tho to skip alll the chorus. i was thinking it as a poem , but it turned out to be a ...

i enjoyed reading this chapter, i like the communication you use between the girls. i think you got critiqued enough, so i just read for enjoyment. i look forward to ...

you can take credit for it bear, you are the one teaching me how to write, and helping me with my mistakes. thank you so much.

Something Out There Chapter three Seth sat on the cold ground not moving. Wings tucked in beneath his cloak. His eyes never leaving the demons face. To think that this ...

great job, i loved this to the very last sentence. everyone else has already critiqued. so i get to just sit back and enjoy reading it. this is awesome. cant ...