Kim

i dont see anything wrong here at all. i could tell you were writing with emotion. how can that be wrong? it showed severe deep pain and abuse. i think ...

again, you wrote an awesome chapter. keep going bear. this is going to be a great book. kim

go ahead and critique the heck out of this, i was writing feelings. Where is the fine line, Between love and hate? A friendship once so special. How could you ...

lol bear, it is still a secret about christian, although i have dropped hints in previous chapters. i should define the demons more. but i have a hard time giving ...

this hit me hard. i know there were some small errors, but the meaning , i couldnt even imanginge going thru that. if you were wanting tears, you got them. ...

this is beautiful. your discriptions were very vivid. it is well written. although i do not write poetry, and can not really critique any errors. i found that your poem ...

you packed alot of thought with few words. i liked it, it has an impact. kim

Chapter 8 The school bell rang and soon the playground was filling with children.Christian stepped out of the school’s main doors and headed down the steps, as he got to ...

your poem is very sad. i could feel the her/him give up. you showed that giving up is never good. i am glad it ended the way it did, it ...

you did it again bear. it is great. i did notice this one seemed more rushed also . the content was great, and you have kept the sense of humour. ...

i really like the third and fourth paragraph, although the first two were pretty good. but the emotion you put out in the last two was awesome. i wouldnt worry, ...

sure, they let you give your opinion. thats good isnt it? not you pat buchanan. already know yours. lol kim

your pictures are so neat, i found myself looking into all the mirrors lol. great job. kim

bummer, i was excited to see it. so i guess i will say it now to, it doesnt show up. let me know when you get it posted again, i ...

oh man, i just wrote a long comment, and it didnt go through. gah bummer. ok well here it goes again. lol ROFL, i loved how you started this out, ...