Kim

wow bear, did not know you wrote poetry to. is there nothing you cant do? this is great, i loved it. kim

this is awesome, you make the world seem like a very exciting place to be. with out any boundries but the ones you place on yourself. the discription shows your ...

this made me laugh, it was so much fun to read. i personally liked the colors, it is a poem for children, and the colors showed that. i love where ...

this was great. the vivid imagery was awesome. i did get confused on the rape part also. but once i reread it i understood alittle better. awesome job. kim

you discribed each word well, it is almost scary to think if it is true. the only thing i found wrong was the format. the bold word followed by the ...

wow this was great. i loved the discriptions. very well done. kim

i am not sure what the subject was, or where it was going. the words used are beautiful. and it is well written. i just honestly did not know what ...

honestly this was hard to read. starting it out with the word " And" confused me. the content was excellent, i think it just needs to be formatted differently. breaking ...

the first paragraph confused me some. this was very dark, and emotionally hard to read. although you did a great job writing it. the discription was very vivid. gruesome. although ...

wow, this had a hard impact. no emotion held back. i loved this. and so very true. i love reading your work. kim

this is very good, it was easy to read and flowed. the emotion was put out there. great job. kim

i agree with the others, other then the puncuation, this is very good. it sounds like you hide alot from those around you. people are never good with reading between ...

wow, alot of emotion packed in a small piece. this is very good. the only part that confused me was the street canary. but it has its place. so i ...

i really enjoyed the discriptions you used. i was able to mentally image them. it made hope the two get together. one will be very cherished. i liked it. kim

short and sweet, i like it. kim