Kim

both of these are beautiful, i like the softness of the yellow tint and the pink shows your eyes more. ok i will choose now, the pink. more of your ...

this is beautiful, i really like your choice of words. i truly enjoyed reading this. great job. kim

this is so great, i love Goliath, he is so beautiful, i can see him and nightmare falling in love. i just love this story, i can tell you love ...

i loved the first two paragraphs, you started out very strong. Here comes the crowd of crying angels, Playing their fiddles in a strange illusion. in this part i had ...

at first i was a bit confused as to who or whom you were refering to, i am assuming it is a mother. the last line made me laugh, but ...

this is awesome, but i to would remove the commas, it would read easier. keep going, kim

i can tell you wrote with emotion i personally wouldnt change a thing, if you did it would take away from what you were feeling at the time. i loved ...

short and to the point. you have packed alot with few words. i liked this alot. kim

this is very good, but i do agree it could be alittle longer. i love the ocean and you described it well. if you dont mind a suggestion, "Almost like ...

this is very good, as i reread it a couple times, new meanings kept popping up. the last time i read, i made me think of a young runaway. taking ...

i enjoyed this, i liked how you used poppies, they are the rememberence flower of our fallen. i could visualize the little red flowers growing where the bodies lay. this ...

i really liked this, short and to the point. i am not sure,if this is what you were going for, but it reminded me of death. very emotional and well ...

this is great, i like how you brought in a girl :) you are doing so well with this story bear. i cant wait for your next chapter. hurry K ...

Chapter 9 Jack Thornley looked around the room. He was standing in front of six men, all seated at a large conference table. The men were nervous, not one would ...

My Sister I have a sister I have known her since birth When I look in her eyes I see mine looking back Her hair is blonde and long As ...