Kim

i really enjoyed reading this. i like how you created the confusion. it read well. kim

Thank you so much Bear. i have made the changes you found. i appreciate your comments. kim

Something Out There Chapter 12 Anna released the hold she had on her knees; she could feel her body uncoil as every muscle fiber relaxed. She pushed the hair out ...

lol, i dont think i need to critique this, i actually enjoyed reading it. it is so true, the way you ended it surprised me, it starts out informative and ...

When roses aren't red, And violets aren't blue, What will become of me and you? ( I like how this flows, and is written backwards, from the normal poem) When ...

all i can say is wow, there are a few grammar errors, but i was so intrigued i couldnt stop reading. i personally like the discriptions you use, the way ...

i liked this alot. it is sad to lose someone and the holidays seem to deepen the loss. i am glad you posted this. kimi

i seemed to miss this one, i am glad i found it. i agree with cat, dont end there, keep writing . lol. i still love this story bear. i ...

i think you have a good story line going. it got my attention from the beginning. with a little work, this will be great. keep going on it. kim

i liked it, it is one of those poems you just write with emotion. you wrote it for you, so dont change anything. sometimes those are the best ones. the ...

it doesnt suck gwen, i actually like it. you put alot in a short space. give your self some credit, i have yet to read anything of yours that sucked ...

wow bear, this is so awesome. i can see this as a movie. you are doing so great with this story. definately one of my favorites. kim

your feelings sure come out in this. i can tell you wrote while feeling them. that is good. The light pitter-patter, Of the rain drumming on my head, Hide my ...

i liked it, the only thing i would change is the glistening like diamonds. it doesnt quite fit a dog theme. but other then that i enjoyed it. kimi

thank you mischiefmaker for taking the time to read my chapter and comment. i am glad you liked it. i am now up to chapter 11 kim