Kilty

Wow, this is such a good story. Really sad. I do agree with the last paragraph being a bit too blunt, and a bit too wordy, but other than that ...

Fontroy-- HOW COULD YOU LIKE SPIDERS? AH! Other bugs do the same work as spiders. Emma-- I finally have enough courage to kill the spiders on my own, but I ...

Grrr I hate spiders! Just today there has been four of them strolling around my house, thinking they belong.

Is there more to this story? It would be a lot easier to read if properly punctuated. I didn't really understand it because I didn't know where one sentence began ...

Summer means hanging out with my mates, being bored, being hungry, being an insomniac, writing, reading, watching, raising havoc. . . .

My favourite colours vary. . . .but at present they would have to be spring and kelley green and blue-grey.

Like the doctors in Brazil that see human organs in Michelangelo's paintings. They're just seeing things that aren't (or weren't intended to be) there.

Wow! Good to see that someone else is not just a materialistic jerk. Many people are these days. It's good to see someone that cares about the emotions of others, ...

True. But I do think that the imaginations of the doctors were working overtime. Michelangelo was had his vision of God and other Angelic Beings, and I don't see why ...

This is a great story. I like how you personified different parts of the brain. It's really imaginative! I do suggest giving each one a more distinct personality, so that ...

I read a little while ago that doctors have closely examined Michelangelo's paintings on the ceiling of the Sistine Chapel, and his painting "The Creation of Adam," and they think ...

I liked this poem. I didn't really understand what it was about though. You have a good writing style, but I just think you could make clearer what you are ...

Argh. . . .Beyonce. What a strange person to pair with Josh Groban.

Thanks for the advice! The nobles are like her advisors, and they share her fortress. I'll go back and make it more clear. The repeated blows is something I had ...

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