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Removing one hand from my stomach I began feeling around my head. I felt a gash on my forehead, another on on the back of my head, and I felt ...

Reading this reminded me of my best friend's old home life with her dad, which is very sad. Like everyone else said, add some more emotional detail to it. Situations ...

I like your idea :) It seemed really enthusiastic, though. Kind of fake. Almost like you were trying to be a cheerleader for Young Writers Society, which, for some reason, ...

This is really cool! I was trying to remember how the song went as I read, and it goes with it pretty well, from what I remember. I giggled a ...

Woah.... I really like this. It's so creative! As pretty much everyone else said, it was a little all over the place, and didn't make a lot of sense, but ...

Bubbly bursts of laughter like many other nights spent together. My bestest friend, Taylor R. I wrote this piece about a very close friend of mine. I decided to post ...

Maybe they're refering to the leather skin being like an old friend, as in they're remembering the same feeling from the last visit, and it's comforting, like a friend? I ...

As the school bell rings, signaling that it’s time to go home, I pack up my things into my backpack hurriedly. As I throw my binder into my bag, my ...

Your lips of fire- Lips of passion On the lips of mine; Blazing. Heating my body, Inflaming my soul, With the warmth of yours; Tempting. Your hands grasping- Hands touching, ...

Do you know what it feels like when you leave? How much I miss you? You wouldn’t believe. Feels like my heart is breaking- little by little. The weight of ...

Interesting... I like the format of this poem. It's cool. As Margaret Louise said, it should be longer. This piece seems like a poem in progress. It definately needs more ...

I think your use of "than" is grammatically incorrect. Should it be "then"? I don't really understand the sentance. Your break points are confusing, and your ideas are broken apart ...

Hm. I had to think about this writing piece for a minute. I like it. It's very interesting. My favorite part was It takes forever for the weapon to get ...

Wow. I love the simplicity! Often when I try rhyming, it comes off cheesey, but this is good. In the section And speaking of grown-ups, There’s one right here, Sitting ...

I liked your idea for this writing piece, but I didn't like your use of the word "people".I think you could have come up with something a little more creative, ...