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I LOVED this poem. All except for one part. You broke your rhyming scheme! Green is the edge of grass, shooting up in spring green is the color of my ...

Oh my god. I LOVED reading this until the end! :( The end disappointed me. "Gone" and "Shone" are spelled similarly, but they don't rhyme!! Other than that, GREAT job. ...

I had to reread your poem to even notice the rhyming pattern (with the exception of the first stanza). Your syllable count is... Odd. I think that's my problem with ...

I don't like your use of "all" and "away". I realize your poem is about running away, but it seems like you could have edited the poem further and replaced ...

The browning petal of life… A weakness or strength? The tears may be flowing, and the future unknowing, the wind barely blowing; your course will take it’s length. The internal ...

Isn't this a writing website? Spare us.

I agree with what Snoink was saying about the lack of description of the relationship. You mention your anger, and your hurt emotions, and that the relationship is nothing but ...

I didn't like the way "thy" sounded in replacement of "your" in that spot. i did notice that as I was writing it, but decided to keep it as "Your".

This is... Great. Just like everyone else, I loved reading this. Let it go. Just let it go. I can't. I can't let it go. Not again. One more strike ...

I really enjoyed reading this! :) Starting here, it became a little hard to follow. I'm not sure if it's just me, but I had to go back and re ...

I offer thee thy crimson tears to take away florescent fears. So drink my soul, don’t suck too much, for come daylight we turn to dust. In the evening, out ...

Hi! Teardrop here! I'm gonna try and review this before I have to leave for a school dance tonight, sorry if this seems rushed. beause "because" You know," He began ...

I didn't even need to read half of this to know that this piece is horrid, steriotypical, and insulting. Don't continue writing, for the sake of everyone else, please.

Wow. It seems everyone has pretty much beat the crap out of this. I feel obligated to apologize for such reviews, because I found this quite nice. It was quick ...

This was a very beautifully written poem. Normally I'm not one for the dramatic poetry, because I like poems with a ryming scheme. With that said, I don't think I ...