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I like this story, somehow (always love stuff about real-life people). It's very good, particularly where you describe what she sees out the window - it builds a real sense ...

Very exciting start, again, there isn't much there to analyse yet so keep writing and posting. I think the part from "I didn't scream ... deep dark blue ocean reached ...

This is my first crit so I'm a bit nervous... I like this story, the place name is great and I love your description of Mars. Most of the comments ...

magic from song I started a story like that a few years back... didn't finish it though. It was called "Song of the Breaking Waves" and based around a sort ...