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Thank you, DD! That's the nicest thing anyone can ever say about someone else's piece. I really do like the lapping better. It flows more.

I should note that I didn't intentionally skp the stuff with the setting ... I plan on trying to fix all that up, of course, once I ... go back ...

I like that version better. It's amazing what a simple suffix can do!

I'm not sure the debate on the piece's placement, but all I know is what assignment it was for. :) Thank you, Fabien, for your comment. Sometimes in things like ...

It's bat. :) As in Batman. "Same Bat time, same Bat channel" from the old, old live-action TV series. So the grammar on that is fine. To be honest, I ...

First of all, thank you! I changed the rating to PG13, just in case. I'm still not sure about rating systems other than games. This would be a T. heh. ...

“My ma is real sick and it’s all your fault!” Mirdoch Adelaide managed a quick weave of his slim torso to avoid the small stone Greglin Millbun hurled at his ...

Thank you! I did go back and read it and it all sounds so bad to me, now! XD Must ... not ... change yet....

I haven't really been back to read any of this since I typed it up after I wrote it. Thanks for all of the wonderful advice! I'll definitely make sure ...