KayKel16

How could this have happened, she thought. Thoughts really should be itaclized from the rest of your writing. It lets your readers know its a thought and not just apart ...

Thank you! Throughout the writiing, I was thinking 'Wait were there even busses back then?' the whole time. I really should research some stuff before moving on.

James was completely and wholly in love with Regina, and now he had heart break to add to that. I think that heartbreak is one word. I don't know if ...

Friends and boys and school spirit passed around her like shadows. I'd like to see this sentence seperated by commas rather than and's, maybe like this? "Friends, boys, and school ...

Disclaimer: This is something I've gotten an idea for. It's something I've never really wrote before, back in the 1880's in third person. It's good-ish so far, but I need ...

She moved with agility, grace and slender that no human could possibly achieve, and so quiet were her footsteps that the dust rising beneath her feet was the only warning ...

I spotted a view grammar mistakes like this one: My Dad looked as unhappy as he had looked when he had finally given Misty the credit card that accessed his ...

I was desperately trying not to think about what was going to take place in the next few minuets but failing miserably, what can I say?! This is probably a ...

A thin smile cam to the man’s lips as he pulled out a small handgun out of his jacket and opened fire, bullets sparking of the dirty, concrete walls. This ...

He quickly realised that he wasn’t in fact going to the seventh floor, so turning to the lady with a smile that she missed, he pressed, or at least thought ...

Hey there, I'm gonna try and be your reviewer! Dun, dun, dun. Anyways! Lou Myers was dangerous. He was a drug supplyer , a weapon supplyer , a kidnapper , ...

I'll be somewhat of your reviewer. All the students, faculty and janitors had left the high school before anything happened to Jake’s notebook and pencil. You are giving a series ...

She answered in french, "No." French should be captilized, it was probably just a typo. Just pointing it out for you (: The cabi stopped the horses, "italiano, hey, Jack?" ...

Can you do a tutorial for Paint.net? It's exactly like photoshop....

ha i just kinda noticed that as well, like showing off a new dress or something. i'm not exactly good yet XD and i have no clue. it was a ...