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  • General Fiction Novels Re: The Sound of My Heart Part 1

    Hi, hi. I'm here to review, or at least find mistakes on your piece. I'll try and find grammar, spelling, even word confusion. Sit tight, and let's get on with ...

    Sep 22, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Deathly Rose

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    Sep 21, 2009
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: the first meeitng

    First of all, welcome to YWS! Check out the welcome forums if your confused or anything, it's really helpful. _______ Traffic jams, dented roads and persistent showers made travelling nuisance ...

    Sep 18, 2009
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Facade (PG 13)

    Hola. I'm here to review your work. _____ Working late that night, for a specific reason, Genevieve d'Allemagne was preparing herself for a special intercourse with victim number 4. First ...

    Sep 18, 2009
  • General Fiction Novels Re: Letters to an Angel part 2

    Hi, hi. I'm here to review your work. I love anything angel wise, and I found your story! [: _______ “Fredrick,” He bolted to what almost felt like a dream. ...

    Sep 17, 2009
  • Writers Corner Re: Word 2007 Is Crushing My Dreams.

    These links may help, I've tried it and works perfectly. I hope this is what you meant!

    Sep 11, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: True Heir, Chapter 3(Second Draft)

    You can call me Angie? I thought, who says that to someone they don’t even know? Itacilize 'you can call me Angie' and 'who says that to someone....'. It's a ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Romantic Novels Re: How to Live - Chapter Two

    Okay, so you had a review for your actual story; plot, character, writing critique. Well, I'm here to find your grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors. [: I continued on through ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: The Silent Queen: Chapter 4-5

    “Got any Sixes?” I asked. Sixes does not need to be capitalized, it's a number, not a person or place. No, really? I wanted to roll my eyes but I ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: My Blood, My Truth - Chap. 1

    They slithered and hissed and gathered round me. Hm, I would put around rather than round. It doesn't fit correctly. How she’d bandaged it and kissed it. I would reword ...

    Sep 8, 2009
  • Fantasy Novels Re: Dreams of Giants -- Chapter 6, Part 1

    He wore a shirt typical of the slums: brown, ragged and unwashed. Comma after ragged. I think that you're supposed to put one before the and as well. _________ Good ...

    Sep 7, 2009
  • Fantasy Short Stories Re: Scarlet Raindrop

    This was plain out adorable. Are you going to add more? I really hope so. [: I found nothing wrong with this piece at all. Well, at least I think ...

    Sep 7, 2009
  • Romantic Novels Re: Three Things (6)

    I'm here to critique, but at the looks of you're writing. I doubt I find many! ______ I said, at the same time that Candy gasped, “What do you mean?” ...

    Sep 7, 2009
  • Fanfiction Short Stories Re: Nightmare On My Street 1 (Movie Night)

    It was a cold Novemeber evening in Massachusetts. November is spelled incorrectly. Look at the way I've spelled it. She was watching Freddy vs Jason. As she sat there, scared ...

    Sep 7, 2009
  • Fiction Discussion Re: Give me the opinions... [:

    On this idea. You have probably viewed this before, with a different idea posted. That's why two comments are still there. It was for the old idea. Remember that, please! ...

    Sep 3, 2009


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