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Re: Shattered Pieces
The accident happened so fast. So fast that if you closed your eyes, even just for a second, you’d missed what caused it. What I did to cause it. I ...
Mar 12, 2010 -
Re: Unwritten Dreams
This is in the right topic area if you're wondering. The fantasy parts comes toward the middle not the beginning so yeah. I have a loose idea about what I ...
Dec 15, 2009 -
Re: First story-- part 6
The rain stopped and the principal, Mr. Nesbitt rounded the corner. After Nesbitt place another comma. This is called appositives, it sets off added information. Does that make sense? “¡Ay ...
Dec 2, 2009 -
Re: depths of night
This sounds like a great idea! I am loving what you wrote. The grammar is actually pretty good. I didn't' find any common mistakes at all. But I did notice ...
Dec 2, 2009 -
Re: Let Me Love You(13)
I haven't read the other chapters, but since you have no reviews on this one, I thought I would critique it for you [[: !@#$%^&*( “Gary, say something… Please!” Isabella ...
Dec 2, 2009 -
Re: A Little Fantasy Chapter 1 continuation
God ’s simple way of reminding everyone that a new day is risen, that a new day is found and a new beginning is here. So... I'm pretty sure instead ...
Nov 26, 2009 -
Re: Paper Piano-Chap. Three
Hiya! I'm here to critique your work. I'm loving the title! ____ His ocean, blue, eyes were blood shot, and his lower lip trembled. I think ocean blue is one ...
Nov 26, 2009 -
Re: Lives Collide
Hi all, this is a little story I just randomly started writing..... Out of procrastination of finishing that last three thousand of my Nanowrimo. Oh well. Back to this one, ...
Nov 26, 2009 -
Re: Have a NaNoWrant!
This sounds like fun, I'm going to try it out. -I've never really thought of plot before, so my plot sucks massively. I think I'm doing it right, but then ...
Nov 18, 2009 -
Re: Have a NaNoWriMo.org account? (08)
I'm vintageXwriter, [:
Nov 18, 2009 -
Re: Suggested Word Count!
I am so behind a thousand! Ah, this bites.
Nov 18, 2009 -
Re: Dreamer (Temp.)
Hey, this is something I just wrote up one day. I'm hoping to create a novel from it. I hope you like it, and please critique! Thanks so much, guys(: ...
Oct 17, 2009 -
Re: Chapter 1 the truth
Welcome to YWS! I'll be easy on you with this piece, (: I always am anyways. Well, let's get to it, shall we? *** Life was simple I went to ...
Oct 17, 2009 -
Re: Don't Reveal your Plotline
Now I find this post, >.< That's happened to me before, and I was always wondering I wanted to write it minutes ago and now I don't? Yeahhh, good post!
Oct 14, 2009 -
Re: Does this sound good?
Nevermind, really. I'll write it and then get your opinions. It's much easier that way.
Oct 13, 2009
