Katty_Wat

I thought this piece was really gripping. I am already addicted to your lillie book, how much have you done now? The night was silent; the moon hovered overhead like ...

I enjoyed this. A lot. The start is good. However there are a few pointers you could improve: 'Cara Hart had survived ordeals in her life, but nothing like this.' ...

As we stepped into the bright, cobbled street from the alleyway, it was like old times. My feet felt lighter, and I could almost see the younger, more vulnerable me; ...

I've read most of this but i just wanted to say a little bit about what you can do to improve. Perhaps give the characters a little description, however leave ...

Just a few pointers to improve: * Quote: One of the drunks lumbered up behind me, he was only four or five years older than me but he still had ...