Katriona

7. I don't understand this part: rounding on him, and his rising to an agitated peak. Sorry, that was supposed to say his voice rising to an agitated peak. Again, ...

Hello! Part one of Chapter two is available at this link if you are interested.

Chapter 2 May 25Th, dawned bright and early. David Wyatt was up long before the sun, his pen making orderly letters on several different pieces of paper. He rubbed his ...

Your updated version is much better than the other one. It catches the readers attention immediately, and makes it almost impossible to stop reading until the end. Good job! You ...

I liked this poem. I liked the repetitiveness of the line "What of material things?" You are really good at expressing yourself in poetry, and this peice really gets your ...

Description of the characters will come later. Up 'till now it is kind of a secret.

Thank you everyone for taking the time to review my story. I will definitely try to work on everything you mentioned. Just to clarify, Asxz, this is why Raphael did ...

Hello xLogan, I have to say, this sounds like a really good beginning for a story. If you continue you it, I will most likely read it. MissMiaFacinelli did a ...

Hello CaitlinGrant, I really liked your story. I liked the normality of it in the beginning, and then the strangeness of it by the end of the chapter. It moved ...

Chapter 1 Moonlight glinted cruelly off the edge of the blade. Held at ready, the knife was a weapon that had spilled blood before, and would do so again. Soon. ...

Hello RSwriter3, I really liked your Poem, it captured the beauty of rain. I do not usually do poems, so the only thing I can help you with is the ...

I liked the story. It is because it happens to everybody that makes it so interesting. What makes your case so special is that you chose to write about it. ...

I could tell that it was a boy. That's really all I was going to say, but since I'm on here anyway, I think I'll say a little more. You ...

Hi! I am not very good at editing but I'll do my best. The door was shutting and closing, Did you mean to say, opening and closing? Often in the ...

Helpful reviews please! The pain woke me. I was hog-tied on the dungeon floor, the stone covered with a thin layer of dirty straw. It reeked of human excrement. My ...