Katharsis

Edited: I don't have the software on my laptop to do anything too complicated. Blurring is too complicated. :( But that seems like an improvement on the coop. Perhaps?

Various aspects of my backyard. (Edited for coolness) Like mah pants? The chicken coop looks decrepit, I love it.

I'm surprised that someone else has heard of it. I found it through Deus Ex, you could find little snippets throughout the game. The writing and imagery was just insane, ...

The king kind of seemed modest at first but then you made him sound like a cripple or a king afraid of dying for his country. Is that what you ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...

Edited the prologue accordingly. I've taken your concerns into account, but I think you'll find that character development is often left for later chapters than the Prologue. Though I have ...

AWritersFantasy: Issues fixed, most of the mistakes you noted that haven't been corrected would only be mistakes if I were to use US english. Made_In_Demise: Last name should be clearer ...

This book is indescribably good. It concerns a group of seven anarchists, each named after a day of the week. They are led by the one known as Sunday, and ...

The Fivefold Road Prologue, Roedra cast a glance behind her, steel grey eyes flickering over the men that trailed her. They were sullen, dull-eyed, taciturn and travel worn. She hadn't ...

Above him shimmered a battle-worn face, whose hoarse lips trembled and panted deeply. The 'whose' here seems out of place, I would rephrase this to indicate 'his lips'. “Someone call ...

By the way, for the information of some fine reviewers, judder -is- a word. judder [júddər] intransitive verb (3rd person present singular judders, present participle juddering, past and past partic

First of all, your first chapter is under the name: "Path of the Strider: The Immortal". This is: "Path of the Strider: The Immortal s ". Chapter One Part II ...

between them all lay [s]baron[/s] barren dust heaps Look through the reviews you've acquired and adjust your piece accordingly. Most of the corrections I would have made have already been ...

I'm impressed. Do some more spacing, make the name of your MC consistent and fix some of the errors that have been pointed out and it's fine with me. You ...

'Green Eggs and Ham' rather than 'I am Sam.' I knew there was something else about it... Didn't hit me, but hey, good job. Also- Just skimming over again: Ahead ...