Katharsis

I am definitely interested.

The 'Good evening fools.' had me interested for a moment. But you ruined it by being nice.

Name: Dale Hilly Age: 15 Occupation Before the Holocaust: Student Autosomal Disorder (refer to link provided above): Spinal Muscular Atrophy Personality: Bitter, primarily introverted with a sort of s

Parkour is awesome. Rock On n' Write On.

Once in a while, the wind would rattle off [s]percusive[/s] percussive rhythms against the shutters of my room, Finally. A good writer.

I found the rhyming to be more distracting than comedic, but it is your poem. It was, like your other one, rather drab to me. The end was alright, but ...

Sometimes it was wet in there, and it was hard to breathe for all the steam. I would replace this with "hard to breathe through all the steam", for, while ...

being roughly [s]2[/s] two the first and [s]4[/s] four the second Numbers are distracting. Up until the number thirteen, it's correct to spell them out. I liked it. Though you ...

If I can't write fiction, I just write in my journal. It's therapeutic and I can pretty much always get myself to do it, even if I'm just saying something ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...

HUMAN NATURE I like the title of it, because it can be taken in several ways. One is that it's "human nature to destroy" and such, the behaviours we exhibit. ...

3. Have you correctly spaced out your work? Notice how may paragraphs all have spaces between them? This is considered proper spacing, and makes it easier for the reader. Otherwise, ...

I think you have a bunch of unnecessary words that just make the poem clunky. There is a bit of a rhythm going, but it could be better with one ...

[i]perduti Something's wrong there. Either you were putting something in italics, or that's not meant to be there. 30,000 pigs each year, 70,000 goats, 20,000 sheep and 40,000 calves and ...

One that I can keep up with. :(