KatTrain

I like the first, the location of the house seems accidental in the second

I know there are faults, so help me please. Or, you know, just burn it to ash. -------------------------- Forget you I shall not, or anything you do or say. Forgive ...

Somewhere in the deep wet of your eyes, I lost something so important, I couldn't remember what it was. See, I've been hungering for my individuality, something you could never ...

Unlike the other reviewer, I understood what you were talking about. But that fact just annoyed me. The narrator comes off as self absorbed, thinking they are so important that ...

Please, please do not listen to Vast. (no offense but i liked how the lines were placed-alot). I loved your detail and for once, it did not bore me like ...

The cuts in my paper thin, paper skin hold messages- hollowly sliding towards my feet. (the floor is farther down then you think) Seems as if even I bleed like ...

Thanks for the reviews! I'm working on the wording, I understand I 'told' instead of showed you the feelings.

cliche, find a new topic. I have heard the same poem tons of times. When you can portray it uniquely, then post it.

A Starry Night There was a gnawing inside of him. -- i dont like this line, it's not very fluent It started at his heavy heart at the chasm, -- ...

I like the last bit. Honestly i've seen too many 'where i'm from' poems to really enjoy it. So 3/10 for creativity. 8/10 word choice. 8/10 voice. 6/10 fluency

Huge eyes swallow up selfishness. I am glued with sticky concerns to the pavement like a coward. But those eyes are expanding for headlights. My boy is a rabbit, lucky ...

*Poem lacks a smooth rhythm, try reading it aloud and revising *The beginning isn't very inspiring, maybe use some more interesting words. The whole concept of them poem wasn't exciting ...

Ugly, a girl walks by. Long nose sloping far south like it's searching for a way out. But she smiles as if the world is- good. And people like me ...

And I will find them all someday From an island lost in the blue. ---- You know the line in a poem that makes you fall deeper into it? This ...

It's simple and declarative, but in a unpleasing way describe the bird and tree more! why does that person's name mean so much? answer that question in the poem, it ...