KatTrain

Forgive me if I come off harsh His eyes so kind His laugh so warm Why can’t I get him off my mind? These don't really rhyme because of the ...

My thoughts and my love drive me differently than you. This is a very weak beginning. It doesn't draw me into the poem. 'love' is such a common word, it's ...

If the world weren't so vast, and my house not so clean I would've been here on another morning, walking in quiet dawn to see a lake unbeknownst to thee. ...

Two arms crossed over holding Two textbooks guarding shielding One cleavage hiding... Two men standing smoking Two cigarettes staring watching One girl waiting... insert somthing here to make clearer

Ode to Freckles: I want to kiss each individual little spot on your smiling face, and would, Awkward, random short line? :/ if you’d sit still long enough. A kiss ...

i hear the wind blowing i hear it in the air replace this with a different verb, 'hear' is a bit redundant i don't know what to do its simply ...

Do you see her as she is? A bleeding heart , cliche laughing to hide the pain. That she’s tired o f lying, tired of crying, use more interesting words, ...

I have writer's Block so I challenged myself to make a poem out of ONLY the titles in the first page. No words added. Every title is capitalized on it's ...

I have taken off my mask like they said I should Now people, seeing me for me. See what I see: Ugly. The scarred indentions from, past good intentions gone ...

I beleive you had something going for you with the fading of the stars. There are some unanswered questions you need to address or else your poem ends up being ...

" he sang to you, sang in" You repeated 'sang' wayy too close together Overall it was good though, congrats

Your imagery is great. I think the rhyming is off We are caught in a vortex of snow mixed with lies. Rhyme The cold is as penetrating as your icy ...

My love , listen to me I want you to be with me I love you more than my life Please would you be my wife ?? We are so ...

I feel the light inside me dim, As I know she is not there. By my side I wish she was, But not until we meet again. You use 'but' ...

I think this was more an emotional-release poem then a artistic poem. try rewriting this when you don't feel so emotional.