KatTrain

"Heart-shaped paper scissor cut Laced with red trim" I know you say you use phrases but there are too choppy, even for your style. They don't make much sense together, ...

I lovedd this! So sincere, romantic, and descriptive. I love how you explain that he really is better then you. It's something people can connect with. "you'll feel the rush ...

It's a good idea. This is supposed to flow like someone's actual thoughts (and I like that), I know. But it still seems too choppy for poetry. 'Mean' on the ...

Could you specify what grammatical mistakes please? Thanks, and thank you everyone else for your reviews also!

A brisk wind blows across a plain of pitted concrete cracked and stained with pen ink and broken dreams and whispers of forgotten things. I know as I wait in ...

Encased in a nightmare I hide behind my hands I like Waiting for it to disappear Waiting for it to Disperse this is awkward all alone The mirror is my ...

I'm counting down the best years of my life with empty beer bottles I like and blood soaked packs of cigarettes, You should've elaborated on this smoke sinking into my ...

Books litter the floor The swivel chair is piled high with junk this line is too long Right beside the door A calendar, old All sorts of clothes to fold ...

The day the sky falls down I’ll forget you. The day the sky falls down I’ll want you more. These lines don't sound poetic The day the sky falls down ...

There was a knock upon the door, repeated twice to implore if I was ever coming out again, and to please, let the knocker in. As if last time I'd ...

Swaying on the broken wind , I feel like I'm never content. What to say, what to make, and why? 'what to make' sounds awkward What to do with my ...

Eyes have fooled the heart before with many curious glances; the glances lead to hearts in mouths a bit choppy and flaming fast romances. Nice intro So quick’s the eye ...

Great Ideas and contrast. The difference between an innocent girl and the player... "You wave to tell me goodbye." Seems like that's normal, a player would wave to force a ...

I watch my dog from my porch, She stalks slowly through the grass. She stops and watches as I walk from porch. She changes direction and is now stalking me, ...

A knife wedged in a wedding cake is a realist view of the world. very clever stanza Love is a silly little fantasy, dreamed up by little girls. i can ...