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  • Dramatic Poetry Re: I Never Meant To Let You Down

    I never meant to let you down. Comma instead But i did. I took the girl you believed in, the girl who had so much potential and hope; the words ...

    Mar 19, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: all these tangled thorns

    It's our anniversary, darling, and I'm waiting 'and I'm waiting' doesn't have the romantic tone it needs and for a second there I could have hated you. 'there' sounds too ...

    Mar 18, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Empty Mind

    May I sit here as and I stare, this revision is just a suggestion Embody pen and paper bare, as Not a lonesome word escapes this Shallow mind, this empty ...

    Mar 16, 2011
  • Lounge, The Re: Hit the Penguin [2]

    320.1 woot? Wait.. mine game's different D:

    Mar 16, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Above the Lake

    In the stillness, The wind brushes against the landscape. wind = movement. wind =/= stillness It was silent not so long ago. alright, this is an interesting line. But... what ...

    Mar 15, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: On Metamorphosis

    Let’s get one thing straight: I am not a social butterfly. Psh obviously you're on YWS! ... just kidding.

    Mar 13, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: My Whispers On the Ocean

    Two shattered hearts, and one broken dream. this doesn't call for a period, a comma should suffice. Nothing was ever as it seemed. You never really explained what wasn't what ...

    Mar 12, 2011
  • Poetry Discussion Re: Prompt Attack

    Write a poem in which the narrator is not the main character, also involve any version of the verb 'to sip' (ex. sipped, sip, sipping)

    Mar 7, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Love Poetry

    Post one poem at a time You need to work on the cliches in your poems. They have an angsty, whining way to them. Don't get me wrong, that's the ...

    Mar 6, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: Do I?

    Wow. wow wowo wowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowowo- Wow. Very nice poem. the wording, everything is wonderful. Do I love..? I think the dots make it more obvious that it is a question posed ...

    Mar 5, 2011
  • Romantic Short Stories Re: Two Truths and a Lie

    I dislike the italicized words, even if they had a purpose. We were in our parent’s home town of Onslow, North Carolina for a festival that was celebrated every year ...

    Mar 5, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Lightning

    A shock. The periods are too abrupt. It. Makes. It. Choppy. Like lightning. a bit cliche with the spark being compared to lightening Leaps from your hand to mine. What ...

    Mar 4, 2011
  • Other Re: Book Trailer

    My book trailer for class. How should I improve it?

    Mar 3, 2011
  • Lounge, The Re: Post Your Pic Here [7]

    In the background you can see the vacuum I'm supposed to be cleaning my room with.

    Mar 3, 2011
  • Official Polls Re: Genre Battle

    Historical fiction, woop woop!

    Mar 2, 2011


I was flummoxed by fractious Franny's decision to abrogate analgesics for the moribund victims of the recent conflagration. Of course, to display histrionics was discretionary, but I did so anyways, implicating a friend in my drama to make the effect cumulative. I think a misanthrope would have a prosaic appellation, perhaps one related to autonomy and the rejection of anthropocentrism. I think they wouldn't think much of the prominence of watching the coagulation of tea to prognosticate future malevolent events, not even if those events were related to jurisprudence.
— Spearmint