KasanKokoro

Thanks guys I didn't realise about some of the stuff. 'yous' is a how they speak up in the north east of england and that's how I want the charaters ...

Chapter One Danny Thornton was a normal boy of 15 until a severe car accident which ended up with both his parents dead. Beep... beep ...beep. Those were the first ...

Really Scary!!! I love it though. Keep writing cause your really good :pirate3: Pirate for you

This is quite good the other guys make sense you need to focus on tenses and describsion. And wouldn't her dad want to know where she was going? But overall ...

Thanks guys I'll try and not use I so much. Chapter 1 is'nt finished yet this is like a preview until I get it all written. :D :smt003

I enjoyed this, it was quite strange, but then again i like strange. I dont understand the whole animal thing but that might just be me. your grammar is great ...

Chapter one: Time to say goodbye It was just a normal morning for me. Wake up, get ready, get Maxie up, get him ready and help Alfred with the breakfast. ...