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Hi JamieAnn, I'm sorry to say that I had difficulty reading this piece. It has persistent technical errors like punctuation mixups (example: the last semi-colon), tense changes (example: second senten

Hi Cassie, I'm afraid I had difficulty following this story. The character reactions didn't make sense to me. These parents somehow don't notice that their baby is ill, when first-time ...

Hi Forest, I thought the writing here was clear, but the overall story feels heavy-handed to me. One party is 100% evil, a generic bad guy with drug issues thrown ...

That's fascinating, Merlin. I'd heard that frost doesn't form indoors - apparently not! What kind of snow shelter was it? Are we talking like a cave made of snow, or ...

Snoink wins the thread. :D

Glad I could help, Elinor. I'd be happy to discuss this in chat if we catch each other. What I mean about being transfered into the novel, It's the exact ...

While I'm on the topic, some background information. Rich, popular authors are continually being accused of plagiarism and sued for copyright infringement by crazy people, so I would expect a ...

Back to the short story being "turned into a novel". What do you actually mean by this? * If the entire short story is incorporated verbatim, that's clear copyright infringement. ...

The plot deals with a struggling single mother who is also a writer dreaming to become published. When, she finally gets a short story published in her favorite magazine, it ...

My personal suspicion is that a telepath would mainly pick up people's bizarre sexual fantasies. People spend a lot of time thinking about sex. I would not want to be ...

My rule of thumb for reusing old tropes is to ask, "Why would a reader choose to read this take on old tropes, instead of the original?" If you have ...

Yeah, I'm thinking a fade to black might be appropriate here. Just imply that whatever happened, it was bad. Readers will fill in the blanks according to their level of ...

Most works posted here are only a page or two in length. Ten minutes max to review. But I also like to review several chapters at a time, which could ...

Traumatic brain injuries are very unpredictable. (The word "concussion" sounds so much less scary than "brain violently slammed into skull causing traumatic injury".) A friend of mine is still sufferi

Hi romance otaku, I read your post on the Lounge board, and since you're serious about making it as a writer, I wanted to give you my honest opinion. The ...