Karsten

Karsten>> Thanks! Easiest critique you had to do, right? ;) :D I love giving unconditional praise. My critique partner gets that so rarely that it freaks her out. Don't freak ...

I read all the way to the end, and with great enjoyment. :) Nice work.

*sigh* why can't everyone get over Twilight and stop writing stories so heavily based off of it? It's my own personal hell. Please don't post another chapter. :( I frequently ...

Hello everyone! Ktg17 here again with our second member review! This time, it’s Merlin34 we are talking about! He joined YWS in April 2007. Then, two days later, he left ...

I like it. :D

You're welcome, Rakun. Glad I could help. :)

68k is pretty short for a novel. I wouldn't worry.

Just a drive-by comment, Lena. I assumed within the first paragraph that the protagonist was a paedophile, and as I read on, I only became more certain of that. (1) ...

Hi Amie, I'll try to be as "brutally constructive" with this review as you wanted. :P This piece suffers from very poor grammar. You've consistently misused commas to create ungrammatical ...

okay guys thinks for the comments but that is why my story is called FICTION it wouldn't REALLY happen in life so yeah what now all of your words were ...

Hi Hero, This is a tough review, so I hope you took me seriously when I warned about the bleeding. I think this piece still needs work. Primarily, I'm seeing ...

Hi Kanen, Today's review is courtesy of the Biblical story of David and Goliath, in which the boy David kills a terrifying giant armed with only a sling. It's an ...

That is a kickass voice you have there. I like it. :)

Write. There is no substitute for writing. Nobody else can put the words on paper for you. Pull the plug on the internet and don't put it back in until ...

Hi Elinor, Quick review for you today. I thought this was clear and fairly well-written. The tenses are a bit shaky though - you need to watch that conditional tense ...