Karsten

Hi there, you fast mover you! After my intro post, I was expecting rules more like "Do not delight in other people's pain". I think your rules are easier to ...

Hi! I'm working on sharpening my critiquing scalpel, and I need new victims on my dissecting table. I figure I'll be hanging out mainly in the literature forums. Nice to ...

Hi Bickazer, Reading on. You're describing Masudo's laughter with slightly too much enthusiasm, imo. I'm getting hit repeatedly with the "maniacal!" and "contemptuous!" hammer. Please don't concuss me

Hi Bickazer, Continuing on from the first chapter. Holy abrupt genre change, Batman! Where'd the spaceport come from? The previous chapter was 100% medieval, accept no substitutes. I'm floundering her

Reading the second part now. This is really very good. The emotion is great. I especially like the way you play with grammar to good effect, for example stacking lots ...

Hi Bickazer, This is a compelling opener. You've interwoven setup, characterisation and plot very skilfully with snappy dialogue and some good characterisation - Nendo's reaction to the explosion and

Hi Eccentric, I get the impression there is a complex political situation underlying this piece, which is both good and bad. It's good, because it reads like you're making an ...

Hi Plus-One, I hate stream-of-consciousness and I double hate second person, so I was surprised by how much I enjoyed this piece. The writing is very fluent. The poem/chant/spell at ...

Hi Jules, Overall, I struggled to get involved in this chapter. The series of very short scenes felt choppy to me and I didn't get enough of a sense of ...

Hi EmmaJane, I have mixed feelings about this prologue. I enjoyed elements of the description - like the ceiling being "white as the clouds of Heaven, wisps of curling patterns ...

Hi 82, This is a good start. Some elements of this spoof/parody were amusing, such as the first paragraph and its list of subverted cliches, and a lot of the ...