Karsten

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Thanks for your input! Karsten; I dunno about the blood thing, because that is part of the story (a lot of it focuses on blood). The sunlight thing... I could ...

There may be supernatural creatures other than vampires who are super-strong, age rapidly in sunlight and drink humans' blood to gain youth ... but I'm questioning whether you can pull ...

I did read it but unfortunately it was posted after chapter two was already up so I couldn’t do anything about it in chapter two. Also I have some good ...

Hi Stealth, I'm not sure if you read my review of your previous chapter. There's always a risk with forums that you're throwing your reviews into a black hole where ...

Hi Stealth, I noticed that you have some really great feedback on grammar, but not a lot of big-picture comments, so I figured I'd pop in and show you a ...

Hi folks, I finally got the blood of my last victim out of the carpet, so I’m hunting for more work to review. Specifically, I’m hunting for writers who: 1. ...

Hi Random, Overall, I agree with earlier posters that this feels generic. The beginning follows a particularly cliched format typical to a lot of YA stories. First, the protagonist's vital ...

Hi PB, This idea follows a familiar framework. It seems like all dystopian/post-apocalyptic novels revolve around a central threat (the Hunger Games, for example) that the protagonist has to confront.

Switching protagonists in a series is unusual, but not unheard of. I recently read Sarah Rees Brennan's The Demon's Lexicon, and I noticed that in her trilogy she plans to ...

Hi Shina, Just a drive-by comment. Love the idea of the protagonist being too afraid/selfish to use her powers on anyone else. I wonder if we could extrapolate this idea ...

Hi Whisperer, Thanks for messaging me to clear this up. I obviously misinterpreted your previous comments - I felt like you were reacting defensively to my criticisms and accusing me ...

Hi JRS, Just a quick comment today. I had a plausibility issue with the core concept here. Your piece revolves around someone who wants to join the military. In an ...

21. Okay, you got through that one, but now it turns out that you don’t obtain math certification unless you can determine the heavier marble in only 2 weighings. Will ...

(These are all really famous, by the way - if you're already cheating by asking us to do them for you, you could just google them.) 24. You and a ...