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I like it a lot, continue!

His tears numbered more than the massive multitude of icy raindrops pouring from the sky. His fists clenched, his cheeks numb, and his heart throbbing, he wep t under the ...

I'm far too lazy to critique this simply because I find it extraordinary! So instead, I'll just comment on what I liked. The dialogue was believable and as Cassandra said, ...

I like this a lot!!

it is vair vair gutt!

I know, but still, are there any basic main starting-point guidelines? *Also, it bothers me slightly when people switch from eloquent to colloquial*

Encore! Encore! That's really great! *looks around* What's so bad about eCntral High?

you go from "Time is like a..." and get really eloquent, to "That really bugs you..." Will this be a casual story? How many characters will/can there be? Could you ...

I agreee with Lampshade, and you might also wantto use the work\d "punk" less, it gets kinda old. It's a great story, though!

Alarms blared and red lights flashed on and off in what seemed like a government facility of some type. A group of heavily armed soldiers ran down the long corridors, ...

Loved it. It had a lot of emotion and it was short and sweet easy to read well writtten through and through. not much more that I can say...

SORRY! SCHOOL! SORRY! either someone take over my character, or kill me off, because my schedule is packed for the next 6 months...SORRY!!!

"Calm down, Carman!" her father exclaimed while fitting her suit, checking the position of the activation button, a shiny blue piece of hardware strapped to her back, "You'll find out ...

I havent read the books, but Ill give this story a try: Name- Carman Age- 14 Hair Colour- blonde and wavy with natural highlights Eye Colour- blue with flecks of ...

okay