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Hi there Coter, your repetition it gets dulls. your repetition is mostly likely fruitless. ^See, it's not as good as it seems. You can definitely making stanzas about the contrasting ...

Hi, The whole "I miss you" is not working. Same with the general cliche that is this poem. It reeks teenge angst/ heart broken "Ohmygoshican'tlivewithoutyou" kind of thing. My question ...

This is very Ludo style poem. The whole blood, sin and disease thing isn't working, for anyone. It's all very cliche. One thing is that you're making it very choppy ...

Mega win. XD

Alright Eddie. Here I go: Overall this is cliche. But it gives me a good idea. So it's like a relationship poem, or a poem about a car accident. Neither ...

I still can't get over the whole Neopets Faerie Cloud feel to this entire poem. The land of the faeries is a pastel dream of purple and pink each food ...

Alrighty. There is a magnificent "Check Spelling" option in the top right corner of the submitting box. It avoids any silly (and highly irritating typos). Please remember that having a ...

18 reviews.

Guh, where to begin? Rain is depression, when you stand in it for to long then you just stay depressed Rain is depressing? Okay. Why is it depressing? How does ...

I have a soundtrack ready for this and everything.

A/N: I reworked it a little bit to take a break from reviewing. The original is in the spoiler. --- and he hides behind his falsetto a breathy embrace with ...

Cool beans. I'll be there.

Alright cool cat, here we go: This entire poem (like math) is cold and sterile. And because you depend on physics/ academic terms for your imgery, they have no feeling, ...

Alright, remember you asked for this. This poem in general oozes teenage angst, out of the ears and skin pores. The kind that's "Oh, I'm so alone and misunderstood, let ...

Gah, I'm finally here, and your poem isn't down yet. :P I win. Overall, this poem is good, but it's barely standing. You've thrown around too man ideas, it's like ...