Kalliope

Hey Rag-Dolly, I like this! You have a nice casual way of letting your character describe everything. It's a bit like in some movies (the main character kind of talks ...

Hey Kyte, I like this. You have anice flow and the rhyming is clear affective and natural. I also like the imagery, it creates a wonderful scene. My only complaint: ...

[Note: I'm not exactly sure where this belongs or if this is any good, so please tell me what you think!] Same old story Boy sees girl. Boy likes girl. ...

Hey, You have a nice flow in most places and a neat topic. As Quippie said, it is a bit short and I think this is definetly worth continuing :wink: ...

Hey, Alice, I'm not sure about this one. I basically really like your idea of describing a situation where someone does not feel ready to face the day and just ...

Hey, I like the idea of this. It's original and I can perfectly relate to it. I also like, that you have part of the chorous spoken. I think it ...

Hey shanan I agree with the other posts that this needs alot of work. SeraphTree and Colleen said the things that popped into my mind emidiatly. Basicaly you need to ...

Scientology, eh? I liked the way you made Debbie seem really nice and everything and then in the end she turned out to be ice-cold. The story describes a very ...

I loved this. I've never had such a great loss in my life, but I've watched people losing a lot. Exspecially this year. In your poem you put into words, ...

*hihihihihihihihihi* This was great fun to read! It matches "jingle bells" exactly and is very well done. All the critical points were already mentioned, so I can just say: Way ...

I think I know the feeling, that's behind this. The struggle, trying to be happy, but being unable to. The melancholy of knowing, it's getting darker again and the dark ...

Wow. This is good. It's true, I love the way you wrote it, the reader can see the girl, it is not obvious at all and I am so greatful ...

snowmen are okay, but I really looooove doing snowangels *feeling like a five-year-old again* our snow gas already melted :cry: I envy erveryone who still has some ~Kalli

Hey, it snowed here yesterday :) I love snow. Seeing the first flakes made me want to jump up and down like a five-year-old. *Snow* ~Kalli

Sounds neat, but I'd need to read more to critique it properly. I agree with Arya about the everything-part. Not much more I can say. If you'd like me to ...