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Re: Reunion
Hey elephantwalrus, after reading through this once, I can say that I think it's a cute story, but it's just a little much in most places... which makes it a ...
Mar 21, 2008 -
Re: No more crying
Hey Rieda, I really liked this. It has a lovely flow, a clear message and even though this topic has been written about a million times I find it special. ...
Mar 19, 2008 -
Re: Noob
Hey there :) I study Latin in school, so I really like your name. Don't worry about making mistakes. I made tons of them (still do, actually ;)) and people ...
Mar 18, 2008 -
Re: Pianissimo
Hey BBB :) , 1) Are the characters credible? Do they need some fleshing out? I think your characters quite solid and well developed. Ray seems to have a very ...
Mar 17, 2008 -
Re: Nothing's Fair in Teen Love and War (chapter 3)
Hey summergrl13 :) , Alicia raced through the cafeteria doors and turned the corner. That was so stupid of me! Why'd I have to be that shy? she thought angrily ...
Mar 16, 2008 -
Re: Lavender Rose Chapter 4
Hii there :) , absolutely lovely. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!! I also noticed about the tense think, but I'm sure you'll figure it out. Ich hoffe ...
Mar 12, 2008 -
Re: Lavender Rose Chapter 3
Hello Heatherish, I simply love this. I guessed that Tia was the one who was moving in next door even before I read it was werewolves, but the kiss absolutely ...
Mar 11, 2008 -
Re: Lavende Rose Chapter 2
Hey Heatherish, I am absolutely in love with this!! Really it's AWSOME! It's wonderfully written and you capture the moments and feeling so well, it's just... wow . I really ...
Mar 11, 2008 -
Re: Lavander Rose Chapter 1
Hii Heatherish, I absolutely adored this and I am totally hooked. I think most of the things I noticed was already pointed out, but I have one or two things ...
Mar 11, 2008 -
Re: Diamond Angel
Hey Yoyo, I also like this a lot, but it did remind me of twilight... Just the whole way he is cold, but beautiful. His face looked as if it ...
Mar 10, 2008 -
Re: The Queen of Dolls
This is brilliant, but very, very disturbing. *shudders* My only complaint: I noticed the same thing about the age as JFW1415 did. She seems very young most of the time, ...
Feb 29, 2008 -
Re: Nothing's Fair in Teen Love and War (chapter 2)
Hi :) As Dylan left for Algebra, his soul seemed to feel lighter than it had all morning. When he arrived in Ms. Willowash's room, it seemed a more blissful, ...
Feb 29, 2008 -
Re: Nothing's Fair in Teen Love and War
Hey, this is cute :) I think I'll be following this. And yes, this is so 8th grade. Her feet wouldn't move though, despite her will to run, so she ...
Feb 29, 2008 -
Re: Don't let me fall
Hey Alice, I like this one :) Here are some peanuts ;) : I’m in a hole I’m holding onto the only thing that I can. If I let go, ...
Feb 28, 2008 -
Re: Song
Hey there! Writing a song about friendship is always great :) First of all, as Alainna already pointed out, you need to change some of the 'are's to 'our's: #1) ...
Feb 28, 2008
