Kaliber

Your answer to my last Crit above was exactly right. Sorry to make it so confusing, i just had a hard time picturing the scenes happening. And i also agree ...

O......M......G AWESOME! freaking GREAT! yea saint got like all of the mis-happens so won't bother. Have you thought of turning this into a script and sending it to a Movie ...

Finally got a name, please Comment, thanks for reading. Golden Guard Chase sprang awake. He had dreamed of the death of his family and nasty creatures. Chase looked out his ...

nvm that, i read it over and caught some stuff. what does the empire exactly look like? like a normal suburban town? or something different? what time period? I'm guessing ...

geez, excellent. hurry and write the next chapter lol, Joking don't hurry, want it to be good. :p

i liked it, makes me want to read on. i think that the conversation was good. only had to read it once to know they where friends. heh, sounds a ...

i loved it, i happen to be getting a fedora in a week or so lol, keep going, i don't see anything that hasn't already been said.

appreciate good and bad comments, thanks for reading. No name yet Chase sprang awake. He had dreamed of the death of his family and nasty creatures. Chase looked out his ...

No name yet Chase was working in the fields when the bell for dinner was by his little sister, Trudy, She's Fifteen. Chase started the long walk back to the ...

CHAPTER ONE "Get up!" Xiet yelled. Chanse didnt have time ot even open his eyes, he pushed himself with his hands to the botten of his bed right when a ...

ug suspenceful, hurry and write next chap hehe, didn't find anything wrong, good work.

oh nice, ha , i didn't see the next chapter was already posted, very nice work, reading next chap next, will this be a novel eventually? i couldn't find anything ...

loved it, couldn't find anything wrong that wasn't already said i guess thats a good thing :P can't wait till next chapter.

wow i love it, very very nice work, a little confused near the end, i hope you continue it, once again, nice work.

TREVIAL: THE PREVIEW Trevial is a strange, dustless, some what maroon place. if you only new what that meant to me. the middle country is mostly desert, the outer are ...