Kaliber

Hey! haven't seen you around much. Welcome to YWS! Im not that good at grammar, so i'll just do the best I can. The spacing is wonderful. He was MVP ...

Ok, awesome, loved it. This just keeps on reminding me of Red Dawn. Im hooked. I hope you finish this unlike all of the other attempted novels on this site. ...

I definetly like this opposed to the other one. Great hooker, I would pick it up and keep reading also. Only a few things... Instead of using Bang! all the ...

Very well writen. Great vocab. I like the way everybody is gathering to tell the story right. I think it would make a great movie if you're planning to finish. ...

I think it reflects the teen nature very accurately. :) I think you should also space the paragraph and break it up some. it was hard to read mainly because ...

Man, i feel like i have missed alot. I noticed that i had to read one or two sentances twice to completely get them. I love it. im going to ...

thanks for your help guys seriously. i don't know what i would do without you . (edited) Tell me if there is still stuff wrong. CHAPTER 2 The next day ...

hm, i like the thing where the dude is like the godfather, in a way. Good i like the idea of a femail assassin, reminds me of electra. The only ...

I would probably say add spaces between Paragraphs. Then I will read and comment. thats probably why i'm the first. Not to be harsh or anything.

Lol, scary story. but is this after or before the bombs? if it was after, I doubt any one would bother to land because of all the radioactive material. It ...

Thanks for posting guys. I'm working on it now. I know that I like am terrable at grammar, and I hate commas by the way:) But im working on it. ...

Thank you for reading. Golden Guard Chapter 1 edited is at bottom CHAPTER 2 The next day everybody got up early. They didn't even look at the mess in the ...

here is the rewrite and edit. i will post it below chapter 2 when i get to posting it. Golden Guard Chase sprang awake. He had dreamed of horrid creatures, ...

Thanks all, This is mainly meant to be a teaser, and i have rewriten it, along with chapter 2 and most of chapter 3, thanks for commenting.

I wouldn't really want to move to long at all, it seems that in almost every Armaggedon book, it mentions london being destroyed first. Bummer. But also they don't really ...