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Wolfskin Lady Wolfskin gazed absentmindedly at the patterns of limned frost rimming the glass of the parlor window. Beyond the confines of the translucent pane, she observed only a shifting ...

Hi. I'm pretty new around here. Call me Kylie. Today, I bring with me a topic for debating... after a semi-rant. Before we being, I'd just like to say that ...

[spoiler] Who taught you how to rhyme? Who taught you about style? Who taught you about grammar? Who taught you about consistency? Who, in fact, taught you all of these ...

I can see what you were trying to do with the commas, but it didn't work very well, as you can probably surmise from the other posts. The commas just ...

For Incog and Dreamwalker's Claw against Fang: Vampires vs. Werewolves contest. Were Wolfsong sound sonorous over valley— Huntingsong victory All eat well fat warm deermeat Tendersteaming flesh Watc

Swooning strolls through meadow parks, Alleyways of mistful darks. In the wake of sister Mary, This her cross she is to carry. Lovely start. I especially liked "swooning strolls" and ...

I stared at the red flames dancing on a silent beautiful melody. "silent beautiful" feels to me like adjective stacking. Also, how is the fire beautiful? It's warm th battling ...

Blodsun In the halls of olden days, Past the gardens wreathed in shades Incarnadine and bone bleached white, Dyed the red of sun's first light, Sat a man upon his ...

I like Cino more than Coni. Cino just feels more horsemanish to me. I don't know why. XD “There are so many flowers Coni!” My hands rested on the cobble ...

Hey there! n_n Overall, you have a pretty good grip on basic grammar and spelling. Your comma usage could use a bit of work, but commas are tricky little things; ...

@Spraynard I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for your suggestion, but I'll be keeping that last line as is. Simplicity tends to leave a greater impact, and I've never been ...

Shadow Tattybogle was quite certain of two things. Firstly, Mistress had chosen a hopelessly uncoordinated dance partner. Second, the man in the corner was going to kill someone. You hooked ...

The second half just confused the heck out of me. @_@ It took a second rereading before I realized the last sentence meant that it was the last time Hiron ...

I feel a little preface is in order. I wrote "The Death of a Vampire" when I was 12. I'm still extremely proud of it. It was intended to be ...

I like the premise and how you characterized Rumpelstiltskin and the Headless Horseman (is his name Cino or Coni, though?). A little bit more background on both their stories might ...