Kale

Before you have always shown from this perspective just his thoughts so it sounded kind of odd to have action as well, I'd maybe rephrase it for this chapter so ...

All of these were done on the Neondragon Art Oekaki Boards. :3 Caurien is a character from Thirilight . This took 3 hours to do. I got lazy with the ...

There's a lot of empty space that you really don't need. I suggest cropping down the picture to cut down on this. Also, the figure has lots of little icky ...

As already mentioned, the place where the wings attach is a bit odd. Also, the bone structure of the wing itself is a bit strange in places. I would suggest ...

Neondragon Art? *gasps* I love her work! Yup. I used to be a regular on her oekaki boards, but not so much anymore. XD The rider also dies in that ...

the paradox of a shared end is each dies alone; trapped in our steel-walled prisons with vacant deities to preserve our bones. This was my favorite stanza. It sounds so ...

Thanks everyone. n_n It makes me so happy that you all like it. But my lovely vivid colors! Nuuu! Then again, the mysterious/sad/ominous mood is very fitting considering that the ...

*sniffle* I love you. Thank you (ad infinitum) so very much for the review. n_n This is the chapter title I'm guessing? Pick one please. I like the second. Yup. ...

This chapter really needs help. ._. I don't know what I was thinking with some of the stuff I did... At least from Chapter 3 onwards, the viewpoint stops bouncing ...

Busy as a Bee She pranced like a tethered pony Held just out of reach of a carrot By the fraying hemp rope on her halter. A little boy taunted ...

It's very dark, and that makes it hard to see. Play around with the lighting/camera settings a bit? Other than that, though, the composition is good, and I like the ...

Rocks? o_O If you mean the white things, they were supposed to be white stone buildings. Very sloppily done white stone buildings. XD I was wondering when someone would comment ...

And now I want to write a poem with the metaphor "busy as a bee" in it... XD You explained things very nicely. :3

Thank you you two. :D The horse's butt is insanely big. XD I originally had the legs thicker, but it just didn't look right no matter what I did. DX ...

The stop sign and the pages were my favorite. I also liked the railroad tracks and the view from the cottage. n_n The first picture of the flowers was colorful, ...