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Wait what whuh? They named him when he first spoke? Poor baby had no name for ages! Actually, he had a baby name that they called him, but they decided ...

My sister and I came up with the character of Squashy last night and thought him so much fun that we had to do something with him, and so here ...

This was very confusing. Whose viewpoint is this being told from: Ebony's or Ashe's? Also, a bit more background on who the diehard are and what "dreaming" is and why ...

[/quote][i] Was she trying to convince me or herself? [i][/quote] Random floating tags. Other than that, everyone else has gone over everything else. XP A bit more description would be ...

Meadowlark was pretty thorough with her critique, so all I can really do is agree with her. XD In particular, you should pay attention to her comments on the long ...

And I just realized I forgot to post part two... XP Well, here it is. --- The door of the inn swung open, and silhouetted in its frame was a ...

The punctuation was very odd. It made it difficult for me to tell where one thought started and a new one began. If this was your intention, I suggest refining ...

Not my idea of funny. I like my humor a bit more sophisticated. :P Humor aside, the rhyme scheme sounded natural and was consistent, which was a definite plus. Unfortunately, ...

Ignore the accent. >.> It's very rough and not pretty. Well, basically this entire chapter is pretty rough, so critique away. Split into two parts because it wound up being ...

My muse is very fickle and takes great pleasure in bothering me when I least have time for it. Like when I'm writing scientific papers. Or when I'm in the ...

Thanks for the feedback. :D @Evi - This poem is pretty old, and I don't remember what exactly I meant with that particular stanza. I based this loosely off a ...

Thanks for the review. :D This section seems to drone on a bit, and does not actually do anything for the poem. I would consider removing it. It might be ...

Thank you both for your high praise. X3 I am not quite sure, but I believe 'demises' should be 'demise' because I think 'demise' is one of those words that ...

"Mirror, Mirror, on the wall, Show me kingdoms' rise and fall. Show me rulers, cruel and fair. Show me lands no longer there." Many questions, many new. Those with substance, ...

This is the product of 3 days no sleep in concert with a mad sugar rush. Written in about two hours. You have been warned. --- "I think that, somewhere, ...