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Hey there! Here to return the review favor. ;P A yellow flower, A rising sun, Morning breaking -- Summer ’s begun. The m-dash makes a bit more sense grammatically than ...

Thanks for the review, AquaMarine. :D The dark humor was definitely supposed to be present; it's practically the reason I wrote this in the first place. XD I think I ...

Thank you, everyone, for the feedback. :D @silented1 - Considering that how the brother treats their sister is the main source of conflict, I felt that focusing on it was ...

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This is an issue that doesn't affect only fanfiction, but all other types of fiction as well. That said, not everyone is into the action side of things; some people ...

Not a bad beginning. :D Still, as with all first steps, there's improvements to be made. While it is impressive that you kept up with the rhyme, in places, it ...

If I'm saying I'm a crazy girl and a pitiful artist why not have a wacky rhyme? That makes sense. :D

I'm glad you both enjoyed it so much. :D @empress - That metaphor took a life of its own. XD But I liked it, and it worked well, so I ...

Glad you enjoyed it so much. :D As for your questions: The who is covered in these lines: a crime where the perpetrator, the victim, the judge and jury, are ...

I think most of the haiku could benefit from some more punctuation. The second haiku didn't flow as well as I think it could. I'd suggest revising the last two ...

This was fun to write. Hopefully it's fun to read, as well. [Edit] Tweaked the length of a few lines. I'm Planning a Murder I’m planning a murder – just ...

First things first: is there, or is there not, a rhyme scheme? You start out sort of having one, then you have a rhyming couplet followed immediately after by a ...

No apologetic glances. No time spent on unwarranted tears. Watch your spelling. I am wondering why there are periods at the end of every line. Grammatically it makes no sense. ...

@Light_Devil! - I'm glad you enjoyed it. The colons were deliberately placed; I was going more for a prompt-and-response format than a list. @Galerius - Ouch. While you bring up ...

Welcome to the site! I hope you have a long and fruitful stay. :D That said, I am going to be brutally honest with you. Please don't take it personally. ...