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I really like the idea of splitting short stories and novels into separate forums. :D A Novels forum would take the place of Advanced Critiques, I would think, and be ...

I celebrate natured roads with a tinge of Human. What? O_o Was this supposed to not make sense? The way the trees seem to sway to the same music, It’s ...

Hello there. I'll be critiquing you today. :D First things first, your punctuation was inconsistent, and not in a good way. Punctuation exists to make meanings clear and should generally ...

Wolf studies: Style and color experiment: Trees! Radioactive white winged panther! This was going great until I went to color the lineart... TT_TT I'll probably paint over the crappiness in ...

Hello there. I'll be critiquing both versions separately. :D Erithea of the fairest seas , How many hast thou made strangers to thee ? Thou'st always been ever cold -- ...

A poem set in one of my many created worlds. The Ruin of Daroder On the fallen banks of a long-dead river, In the shade of skeletal trees, Sprawls the ...

I'm wondering what is up with the formatting. It made this difficult to read. What did you use to type this up? If you used Notepad, there's an option under ...

Hello there! :D After reading through this, I'm assuming that English isn't your first language? Because of this, I'll be trying to give you some general advice in addition to ...

Kyllorac: I checked, and there's nothing wrong with the draft system. Are you sure you hit 'Save' then hit 'Yes' when the message appeared asking you to save the draft? ...

I lost a critique draft. TT_TT I don't know exactly what time I saved it yesterday, but when I looked for it to complete it just now (1:30 EST), it ...

Once you picked up speed in seeing the mistakes riddling the narrative, I think you kinda bulldozed some things which could have been given the benefit of doubt. Like what ...

Harry and Eldern stole stealthily through the shadows , without speaking . When you are stealing through shadows, it's a given that you are being stealthy and silent. Redundancies not ...

This was very short, and because of how short it was, I'm not sure what to make of it. Also, since this is just an excerpt, it's difficult to critique ...

I also am quite fond of what Kyllorac suggested in the other thread about the additional color in place of purple and blue for people to go to if they ...

Neato. :o