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Hey, Dems. I see you do lyrics, so if you would review this unloved piece of mine ( Fate (An Interpretation into English) ), I would be most appreciative.

Attention-grabbing whore Your formatting also needs to be fixed. There really shouldn't be such a huge space in between the lines as having each line as a separate stanza doesn't ...

Hey there. The first thing I'd like to say is that if you're emotionally attached to a poem, it's best not to post it for public review right away. Instead, ...

Such a simple and sweet story. :D It's a bit short, but I think this would work great as a picture book. There were a couple of mistakes I caught. ...

This was a nice, simple poem, and I enjoyed reading it. :D I agree with Juniper: the first line of the third stanza needs some work. I would suggest rephrasing ...

Thanks, all. :D They don't really look like their fit and don't seem the same quality of art as the rest of the picture. That's because I got fed up ...

I think about my life(comma) how it's flashing through my eyes "It is" becomes "it's" while the possessive form of "it" is "its". Be sure to pay closer attention to ...

Why is the first paragraph italicized, but not the rest? I could reassure myself that , as amazing as she seemed to be , she was never smarter. She ended ...

It's always in the tribulations of frustrating work , a more melodic, peaceful, and authentic impact on self advancement How can impacts be melodic and peaceful? What was your goal ...

I liked this. There was a definite rhythm to it which really made the poem flow. I think breaking this up into stanzas where you change the rhythm would be ...

I liked the simplicity of this poem, but the rhythm just feels off to me. With the exception of the first two lines of the last stanza, none of the ...

The site is much faster. :D My poor, eleven-year-old computer much appreciates this.

Hey there, speakerskat, and welcome. I hope you enjoy your stay here. :D Kaywiia gave you some very good advice and brings up some good points; I would listen to ...

I agree with jasminebells; the last line was really weak. Your rhyme falls a bit flat because there is no consistent rhythm; rhymes rely heavily on rhythm, and without a ...

This is an interesting subject, and I like how you separated the viewpoints of the Writer and the Critic. Another thing I liked is how you start each section with ...