Kale

Thanks for the reviews. This should be, "To my Love I have never met..."? See, the question mark is outside the quotation marks. ^.^ There's actually a couple of reasons ...

Hello there. I see you're new. :D You might want to go and review some other members' works; not only are people more likely to want to review you, but ...

I felt like writing a villanelle. To My Love I Have Never Met To my Love I have never met, Destined though we are to wed, I wonder, “Do you ...

Whilst that firm and apathetic authority stands looming over us all. Sentence fragment. "Whilst" really stands out, and not in a good way. Also, what authority? As the wind sways ...

Well, Jasmine was pretty thorough in her review, and I have nothing else to really add except to second her suggestions on punctuation. It will make this poem much easier ...

The first thing I noticed as I was reading through is that you have a number of spelling mistakes. It's always a good idea to go back through and reread ...

in a mutual state of bliss. This line struck me as a tad too wordy. who surrenders her will wants to die a little Coupled with the line "but also ...

It looks like the formatting of your poem got messed up. ^^; If you can, try to fix it. my heart would jump with emotion. that watch the night , ...

This was very short, but not in a bad way. :D I do think the poem could do without the O_O at the end, though. Some of the lines felt ...

Lightly like butterflies Watch your spelling. The ending felt very abrupt and inconclusive. There was no sense of it being the end. I'm also wondering where the fear the narrator ...

Clink, clink. This line struck me as a bit out of place. Light doesn't make sounds when it hits objects, and I have a hard time visualizing noisy light. Long ...

Alighting on branches, hills and valleys, Leaving no trace but the sighing of boughs , Be careful with spelling and word usage. "Bow" (pronounced like "bough") is actually a verb ...

This poem really struck me as standard teen angst fare. As sugarxsnow already mentioned, the forced rhyme, inconsistent rhythm, and lack of unique and clear imagery really didn't help things. ...

Enter the Forest of Eternal Depression. Its looks may fool you, so beware. Once you enter this beautiful forest, it will be close to impossible to escape. The moment you ...

Thanks you two. :D @Nate - Now that you mention it, I think periods would work better. *putters off to change them*