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I liked this poem. It was nice and simple, yet you nicely showed how people are different, and the rhyme did not feel forced. The rhythm in the line "I ...

I found that the inconsistent punctuation made this difficult to understand on first read through. These lines in particular: This here what I behold The blood and the body Is ...

As I opened my eyes and saw the attractive sunshine I saw "attractive", and I winced. Attractive is just not a word you use to describe sunshine. It just struck ...

This was very interesting. I enjoyed reading it and puzzling out what He is (I'm still not quite sure what He is, but that's part of the fun). My only ...

Fear my monster post! Rawr!

Corda - Room A2 - 1:50 PM - 2:40PM "I can't turn it off, if that's what you're asking." Nolan smiled, completely recovered from his brief panic, and Corda softened ...

Dear Nate, Every time I try to log out of chat, it opens up a new window in a new frame in the same page. If I try to log ...

You have a lot of unique imagery going on here, but I couldn't really appreciate it because I was distracted by the irregular rhythm and typos. For example: Futile was ...

Aside from the chorus, nothing was consistent. Also, a lot of the lines struck me as too short, and there were a lot of rhymes that appeared and disappeared at ...

I really liked this song. It just had this wonderfully dark feel to it. I just wish it had more than one verse. My only quibble with the writing is ...

These lyrics were pretty amazing. You have a great sense of rhythm, and I could almost feel the song. The one thing that tripped me up is that it isn't ...

I'm really not sure what to make of this poem because it was so very short. I'm also confused with how the lines all relate to one another, especially the ...

Well, this flowed well enough, so it wasn't difficult to read, but there were a couple words that made me go "What?" and the ending of the poem struck me ...

Hello, Anshita. As DRdante already pointed out, this belongs in the Lyrics section rather than Lyric Poetry. I suggest you PM a moderator and ask them to move it for ...

Hello there. It's always sad to only get one review, so here I am to review you, too. You started out with a very interesting premise, however you switched to ...