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A review on Chapter 3 of The Fox and the Prince would be much appreciated. :D

Shinning. Reflecting. A stain. The pain. I believe you want "shining". This poem struck me as very disjointed, in the confusing way. I have no clue where "Henceforth visitors" came ...

One thing that caught my eye right off the bat was that the first letter of every line is capitalized. I think this poem would be much stronger if this ...

This was very short and not very poetic. It reads more like a description of the symptoms of death rather than a poem about death. Basically, it's too literal, and ...

I like how you tied in the feelings of nostalgia to the hammock and the trees. It was a good use of imagery, and it really made those nostalgic feelings ...

This was very short, which wasn't a bad thing at all. I actually liked how this poem was so brief, and how the last stanza tied into the first. I ...

my blood, my come Wrong "come". This was very disjointed, and it took me a second read through to realize what you were writing about. It's not a bad thing ...

Your first poem could do with a whole lot of expansion. Right now, I feel like you were going somewhere, but then you suddenly dropped it. Explain how poems are ...

I gived you all I had, "Gave", not "gived". Lyrics should be punctuated following the same rules as prose and poetry. Right now, these lyrics are not, and it leads ...

Brutal honesty ahead. Brace yourself, or don't read. There were a lot of spelling mistakes in this, and you really need more punctuation. Poetry and songs are punctuated the same ...

PhoenixBishop was quite thorough in his review, so I'll just be basically reinforcing what he said. You have a lot of infodumps. The one in the classroom wasn't so bad ...

Cogito ergo sum. I think, therefore I am. This simple statement, made by Euclid so many years before this day Descartes, not Euclid. Carpe deum. Carpe diem. This was entirely ...

Hey there. You might want get around to reviewing other users' works; it'll not only get you more reviews, but also the points you need to post more of your ...

(alcohol) quit whenever you want. I think it works better phrased "quit (alcohol) whenever you want." It makes more sense and fits in with how you've placed the other such ...

Corda - Infirmary - Tuesday - 5:37 PM Corda sat by Nolan's bedside, watching him breathe; it was her only assurance that he was still alive. He looked terrible, vivid ...